Tariq (1 like)
Such a creative and fun story! I really enjoyed it, good job!
Aug 21, 2022, 11:02 PM
Kaylee (1 like)
THis story is so nice! I really like how everyone thinks that 4 bar wifi would be perfect. A great analogy to make the audience sympathize with the character!
Aug 21, 2022, 9:18 PM
Annabelle (1 like)
I love your story! I think your balance between music and dialogue is perfectly balanced. I think you visuals are really good and help tell the story. I think the character development of Roamin and Bemo and their relationship is very interesting and great to watch and follow. I loved your story! Great job!
Aug 21, 2022, 4:58 PM
Cyruss (1 like, 1 helpful)
What a cute little story. From start to end, the story was very interesting. This story seemed to heavily rely on narration and that's not an issue. Luckily, the narration was clear and concise and helped me understand everything when the drawings couldn't. Your drawings felt more like a nice esthetic to look at rather than something I felt like I needed to watch, and that's just fine. I really love how clear and concise everything was in your story. It's well established at the beginning that Romain has social anxiety which makes later scenes easier to understand. The voice acting was also spot on in regards to delivering the right mood. The voice acting felt like it was realistic and not just read off a skip of paper.
I think the strongest part of this story is Romain's character development while the weakest part is the visuals. It all seemed like a massive improvement from the story descriptions. I understand your story well, and I felt entertained the whole time. To rate your story, I'd give it a 95/100. Well done! Thanks for joining the program.
Aug 21, 2022, 3:16 AM
Amaya (1 like)
I like the story idea, and the creative art which are wifi signals. I don't have any suggestions great job on your final story.
Aug 21, 2022, 12:22 AM
Adrian (1 like)
Love the story and the editing. The moral is so good too.
Aug 20, 2022, 5:13 PM
Zoey (1 like)
I like the moral of the story that we all have bad days. The opening was super cool with all the clouds and the music was awesome too. I immediately recognized Aangs voice!
Aug 18, 2022, 10:43 PM
Mason (1 like)
Just wanted to congratulate you on finishing! I enjoyed this and liked the addition of sound and sound effects. It was already a good story but you really made it come to life with the finishing touches. Really good job!
Aug 18, 2022, 3:54 AM
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